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Hello! It had been quite a while since I played this, so I have to say that the game is looking marvelous! And everyone's so pretty and charming! I love Gnarl the most, they're awesome and I really enjoy the dynamic they have with the protagonist. That's all I wanted to say, haha. Wish you the best with the rest of your writing, and hope you have a good day!

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Thanks for taking the ime to comment !!!!! I'm glad you like my frilly criminal πŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ you have a good day as well!

Alright, so I fell for Gnarl, now what. :( I want my happy ending

Here's hoping for one !!! πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

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Hi!

I've been following the game for a while now and have been checking in from time to time and I was wondering if the game still stops at the beetle in Valerian's route? 

Also, I just wanted to let you know that in some instances, the "Next" button would disappear.

Thanks! :) 

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Thanks, I do have the next button errors written down, I've just been developing different games in the meantime πŸ˜…πŸ˜… and yes, Valerian's route is technically finished as far as the demo goes. Abeni is going to update next and then MH will be developed until the end (privately) and released in full !!

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Sounds good! Thank you for your hard work and I hope everything goes smoothly! <3 

hello! I'm playing your game rn but stuck at valerian routes TT


[code]
I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 877, in script
    if _race == True:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 877, in <module>
    if _race == True:
NameError: name '_race' is not defined

-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------

Full traceback:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 877, in script
    if _race == True:
  File "C:\Users\User\AppData\Roaming\itch\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\ast.py", line 1832, in execute
    if renpy.python.py_eval(condition):
  File "C:\Users\User\AppData\Roaming\itch\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\python.py", line 2059, in py_eval
    return py_eval_bytecode(code, globals, locals)
  File "C:\Users\User\AppData\Roaming\itch\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\python.py", line 2052, in py_eval_bytecode
    return eval(bytecode, globals, locals)
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 877, in <module>
    if _race == True:
NameError: name '_race' is not defined

Windows-8-6.2.9200
Ren'Py 7.3.5.606
Manor Hill 1.0
Tue Feb 23 19:56:09 2021
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CRAP someone pointed this out to me like a month ago in the Discord and I fixed it late at night then forgot about it. Gimmie an hour to upload the new version ;; thanks for pointing it out !!!

you're welcome! glad i can help <3

Hello. I've just started playing your game and so far it's really fun. I like all the Characters but for now I've decided to go Valerians route. Unfortunately I've stumbled on an Error code I can't make heads or tails of this so I hope you don't mind if I post the whole error message here:

I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1236, in script
    if _surrender == "true":
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1407, in <module>
    elif surrender == "false":
NameError: name 'surrender' is not defined

-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------

Full traceback:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1236, in script
    if _surrender == "true":
  File "C:\Users\steff\AppData\Roaming\itch\apps\manor-hill\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\ast.py", line 1832, in execute
    if renpy.python.py_eval(condition):
  File "C:\Users\steff\AppData\Roaming\itch\apps\manor-hill\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\python.py", line 2059, in py_eval
    return py_eval_bytecode(code, globals, locals)
  File "C:\Users\steff\AppData\Roaming\itch\apps\manor-hill\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\python.py", line 2052, in py_eval_bytecode
    return eval(bytecode, globals, locals)
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1407, in <module>
    elif surrender == "false":
NameError: name 'surrender' is not defined

Windows-8-6.2.9200
Ren'Py 7.3.5.606
Manor Hill 1.0
Wed Oct 28 00:52:33 2020

It happens after Valerian storms off and leaves you with Titus, June and Noor. It happens only if you choose to stay or clear your head and it's the same error message. Choosing going back to your stupid room seems to work fine.

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When did you last download the game? I have that one marked as fixed with the last update, which was...a few days ago? So hopefully my versions aren't messing up !! My code has it laid out correctly, so please lmk !!

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Well I downloaded it the day before yasterday I think? But I've tried to update it and it said I had the newest version. So now I tried to deinstall it and install it again but for some reason I can't download it on my computer anymore and I don't know why. I'd like to let you what happened but I can't get the game to reinstall. I'll try downloading it on my phone maybe that works.

Well it worked on my phone so I'll play it to the same point and try to make the same decisions and let you know what happens.

Okay on my phone everything works right. I still can't install it on my Computer but thats an issue from my side, I think, and not yours. I'll just play the game on my phone now. Thank you again for this wonderful little story and sorry for freaking you out.

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No problem !! It's always nice when it's bugs I know how to fix πŸ˜…πŸ˜… also re: trouble installing it on the computer, you could try clearing it out of the Ren'py cache (if you haven't already). Here's a link to help with that (it just lets you know where the saves are stored and how to reset progress: maybe something's just clogged up in the pipes and keeping you from reinstalling!)

Thank you for the reply. I deleted the stuff in RenPy now but it didn't help. When I try to download the game it opens the window where you choose the file you want to download and where but the field for the file to download just stays empty. The error message says something about an undefined build and that's that.

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Hey, after you go with Valerian and find the beetle mark, a few text pages after I get this error

I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 2017, in script
    jump choice4_done
ScriptError: could not find label 'choice4_done'.

-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------

Full traceback:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 2017, in script
    jump choice4_done
  File "E:\!Full\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\ast.py", line 1697, in execute
    rv = renpy.game.script.lookup(target)
  File "E:\!Full\ManorHill-1.0-pc\renpy\script.py", line 898, in lookup
    raise ScriptError("could not find label '%s'." % str(original))
ScriptError: could not find label 'choice4_done'.

Someone else also told me this but your comment was the lucky one to get me to go "wait, what?" and it turns out it wasn't changed in Valerian's route, nor Abeni's πŸ˜…πŸ˜… oopsie. I'll be uploading the fix in a few minutes (as long as it takes Ren'py to build the APK again). Thanks for letting me know !!

Good night, I just played your game right now and I'm doing the Valerian route and I'm loving it. But in chapter 3 I found several bugs, regarding the answers and I wanted to know where I could send you the information so that you can repair them.

Thanks for finding them! If you have specific line numbers or general information as to where you were in the story when something went wrong, feel free to just mention here if that's easiest! Otherwise I have a dev blog ( heart-forge.tumblr.com ) where you can send potential screenshots or any other information you have !! Here works too though, if you didn't want to use Tumblr.

The first bug that i found is the "Next" picture that in the Valerian root go away and don't show it again.

The second,

[code]
I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1236, in script
    if _surrender == "true":
  File "game/valerian.rpy", line 1407, in <module>
    elif surrender == "false":
NameError: name 'surrender' is not defined.

The only error I saw is that the "_" was not put in "elif surrender", when I entered the file "valerian.vpy" and I put the "_" everything was solved. ^^

Fixed on both counts !! You're right about the variable thing: everything was recently renamed to better reflect to me what was important and what was just a transitory variable and what I would be potentially bringing back later. As for the first part...thank-you for reminding me that I absolutely meant to add the next button to Valerian and Abeni's route and then totally blanked on it πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜… now in theory, it should work (barring any screen fade weirdness). Thanks for letting me know !!

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I'm really glad I was helpful ^^

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I haven't played the game yet but I'm curious, why the gorgeous woman in the banner picture is darkskinned with kinky hair and in all the other pictures she's lightskinned with long curls and just looks completly different ? I was so excited for a vn with a darkskinned woman for once....

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Different artists πŸ˜” Valeri's artist drew the UI and promotional art for the game, and she drew it before I had secured Abeni's current sprite. I was in a rush to have her sprite work done as there'd been a long gap between Gnarl and Abeni's updates, and am looking to redo the art (for a variety of reasons, not just the one you brought up although that's a big one) once I can find an artist within the game's limited budget (which is just whatever I can find to pay). 

My ideal artist ended up being way, way out of budget (totally fair on her part just deeply unfortunate) and I ended up working with an artist I wasn't familiar with so I wasn't as involved as I usually am (contrasted with Valerian and Gnarl's artists, who are both good friends of mine). When I was seeking Abeni's art, it was in a weird time of year when a lot of the artist I was looking at were simply not open for commission or too professional for me to afford. It had been so long between updates that I went with someone I could find that had any experience drawing black folks (another big problem as I was going through different portfolios was a variety of artists with no example pieces of anyone but white people). 

I like Abeni's current sprite art in an objective sense where I think the sprite is very pretty, but my ideal art would be more of a combination between the banner art and the sprite art. My fault for not being as assertive as I could have been and not understanding the commission process as thoroughly as I could have, and will ideally be fixed as soon as her next update, or as late as final release.

Thanks for asking, though !! It's been a weight on my mind for a while.

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Thank you for answering so fast, I completely understand. I was so frustrated when I saw that she was the only one with a changed charadesign...

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An unfortunate accident of timelines and different interpretations of the pinterest boards I use for art references. Valerian's artist is my best friend so she barely needed any input to get what direction I was going in, and she'd also read the story versus the sprite artist who hadn't. I'm really looking forward to hunting down the new art once I have the money to do so again !! I've learned a thing or two about commissioning folks since then and hopefully the final product will be worth writing home about !! 

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i have been playing this daily and i cannot put it down for a second because i start thinking of it again, good job cause you just made me ADDICTED ✨

AHHH thank-you so much !!!!! I'm glad you like it !!!! πŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’š There'll be an update soon once I can haul through edits on Gnarl πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜…

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Goodness, let me tell you how I was so sucked into this game that I didn't even realize it wasn't done yet! Can't wait to see where it's headed <3

I'm glad you like it !! Hopefully there's an update iminent: Gnarl incoming soon !! πŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’š

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Is there an update somewhere on the horizon, by chance? I found it surprisingly hard to put down once I started.

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Eventually! The game's absolutely still being updated but what with civilization collapsing and a bunch of other stuff going on on a personal level, I find myself with precious little time to actually work on it πŸ˜…πŸ˜… gotta prioritize what makes me money enough to feed my dog and all. I'm so glad you liked it though !!!! Thanks for commenting !!! πŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’šπŸ’š Gnarl gets updated next, and then my other game Bad Ritual will get updated, then Abeni, and then public updates will be finished and I'll work on finishing the last four chapters of the game.

Haha, yeah I understand. I wasn't trying to rush you or anything, it had just been a while since the last update so I wanted to know if it had been abandoned or something. Glad an update will eventually come, but yeah focus on feeding yourself and your poochy!

Ah no problem! I didn't think you were I'm just upsetti that I never have time to work on it πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜… quarantine was supposed to give me free time!

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I just found this game and I'm completely in love! The story is so well written and the characters are just so lovable! I can't wait to play more!!

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Thank-you, I'm glad you like it !!!! And I'm glad you like all my disaster children πŸ§‘πŸ§‘πŸ§‘πŸ§‘πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜… thanks for commenting !!!

This story has become my game equivalent of comfort food. The writing is superb, the dialogue is funny and the characters are so delightfully unpredictable. Can't wait for more! 

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I'm so glad you like it πŸ§‘🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 and that it's so comforting 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 thank you for commenting !!!!!!!!!

Right off the bat I knew I was going to love this game, it took me like two pages, three tops. The writing is so good, and the story flows so nicely, I found myself replaying the game several times to check all the options (you should have seen my face when I realized that you do not, if fact, always win the card game. I love that idea). The descriptions are so detailed and vivid you don’t even need illustrations to see how the world looks like. And the characters… don’t get me started. I love story based games, and this one is easily one of my favorites now. Thank you for making it, I really enjoyed the time I spent playing.

AHH this made my day !! I've been trying to decide how to respond that isn't just an incoherent aHHHHHH but that best expresses my feelings about your review. Thank you so much !!! 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑

I am so absolutely in love with all of this!!! I have two saves for each character, just for grins and giggles. When do you think you'll be releasing the next update? I'm dying to know! Thank you for blessing this platform with such a work of art :')

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THANK YOU !!! I'm glad you like it !!! Next chapter (Gnarl) doesn't have a hard release date: it's just me and what with quarantine decimating my jobs, I've been working away at freelance and finishing up school πŸ˜…πŸ˜… luckily MH is all planned out, it's just a matter of getting the words into the code and all. 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 thanks for commenting !!!!!!

I just wanted to say that I'm absolutely in love with your writing. I started with Manor Hill and now I've gone through all your games. I can't wait for the next update! I'm so invested in such a short time!!

Ahh thank you so much !!!! 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 I'm glad you like them !!!

This game hit a little too hard what with the quarantine, but this game was still a delight! Did it leave me wanting to scrabble at the walls? Yes. But I adored all of the characters so much!! Valerian was surprisingly sweet once you got to know him, Abeni had me swooning, and Gnarl is delightful of course!! I love all of the main characters with a passion and have a save for all of the routes! All of the games you have up are stunning, to be honest, and they've made my day! Thank you so much for making this!

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Oh god I didn't even think of that πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ a whole new layer of interactivity. Imagine quarantine but you're not in your house or the house of anyone you know, with strangers. God. I'm glad you like my games and hope you're still okay after playing them all πŸ˜‚ they're a LOT

Just played this game (Valerian's route) and I am very excited for more! 

I'm glad you like him !!!!! πŸ§‘🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑

This was soo good wtf?!?! I fell in love instantly with both Valerian and Gnarl (I'm swooning so hard haha). Can't wait for more, your writing is amazing!! πŸ’–πŸ’–

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I'm so glad you like them !!! Gnarl's up next for updates once I finish up some finicking with my other game 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 thanks for commenting !!

Other game you say?? πŸ‘€πŸ‘€

If you check my page, there are two other romance games. BR has the most content, Hybrid was a quick proof of concept promotional post that's not currently in development but still something πŸ§‘πŸ‘€

Ah wow, published 6 minutes ago, that was fast ahhaha thank youu!!

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I JUST moved it over like right now so we've all got fantastic timing πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

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fiiinally playing Valeri’s third chapter

love the little β€œevidently bulletproof glass” detail, i laughed

the sense of frustration is so well built up throughout

ooohh i love Noor’s snark, β€œguard your face better in the future” they say with half of their face literally physically guarded

β€œa date and a job interview all at once” OOOF

lovely touch about how most of the members have something colourful about their looks

aahh i love Ruth and Ai and Max !! and everyone very clearly enjoying watching mc and Valerian dance around each other

as always, loooving all the choices you give, especially with what happens after Valerian storms out and the implication that he was waiting in their room and went looking when they didn't show up? i love this earnest man

very very excited to find out about his surprise and WORRIED about this Naomi

AHH I'm so glad I was so worried that The Gang (tm) was kind of overkill β˜  ☠ ☠ but I'm glad you liked them !!! Honestly I saw in my inbox you commented I was like YES ENDORPHINS FINALLY lmao and GOOD I hope everyone is a little worried about Naomi because that's a knife I am breathlessly waiting to twist.

Val sure is spicy. Man, I got sucked into this story and I haven't even touched the other two characters yet, Looking forward to experiencing them! I eagerly await the full release. I'm actually suffering withdrawls... ^__^

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Glad you like my crime boy !! Hope you like the other two just as much. In the meantime, if you're interested, I do have another game. Different genre but ideally a similar spice πŸ˜… thanks for leaving a comment !!

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I am in love with how you've written each of these characters - I so naturally grew fond of them, and I feel invested. I look forward to more of the story, can't wait!

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I'm so glad you like them !! Thanks for reading and commenting !!! 🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑

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well your writing is fricking amazing o.O really i do love how you descibre the scenes and such, its pretty! im looking forward for the next chapter! Btw idk if just me but this font plus the black background if i read for too much time(like 10min?) its make my vision blur(i use glasses) , so i stop for some time, and start to read again... i really need some colorful background or something (could be like a random mannor background?) . like i said idk if im the only one

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Ultimately it's the format. It's less to do with the black background/white text combo and more to do with larger text blocks and less visual movement than traditional VNs (using your example, the background that's an actual scene: in full VNs those change, which create a kind of visual movement that alleviates the whole burning text in your eyes, in addition to there usually being less text per screen with larger text blocks interspersed only occasionally). It's the same reason a lot of people can't do ebooks that don't mimic paper and ink: it's just good old fashioned eye strain. 

I don't think changing the background would do much but burn a different image into your eyes πŸ˜… it's probably got something to do with the glasses in the sense that it affects you more strongly, but I think the best thing to do is what you're already doing and take breaks. It's a lot of words so it's kind of surprising no one's brought it up before.

I'm glad you like it though !!! Even with the visual attack πŸ˜…πŸ˜‚ πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•

I see! it's make sense, thanks for you time to anwser me! its really kind ;)

haha ikr!i saw you made another game too, bad ritual right? when i have time i will play it too ;)

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Hope you like it as well !! Thanks for commenting πŸ˜Š

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Wow - the writing in this game is UNBELIEVABLE. Valerian's route is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work! So excited for the next chapter.

Glad you're liking it !! If you'll indulge me in a bit of shameless self-promo, the way I update things alternates between LI's and between games, so you may be interested in checking out my other game (not on itchio, which is why I mention it) Bad Ritual ?? IT updates next, since Valeri just got his update πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’– thanks for commenting !!!!

Self-promote away! Would love to read - thanks for letting me know!!

Ok, so I need more of this. Like a lot more and I'm not sure I'll be satisfied then....keep up the good work.

Glad you like it πŸ’•πŸ’• Valerian's in the process of getting more if I could find twenty spare minutes to write πŸ˜…πŸ˜…

When I make more money, I will buy you SO much coffee <3

The satire is flawless, I could not stop laughing, and was undeniably charmed by each character. Such good work.

I'm glad you like it !!!! πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•

Hello! I love love love your writing and the vibrant characters and worlds you've created. Your stories are so immersive and I can't wait to read more. BTW I absolutely stan your inclusion of POC and queer characters. 

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🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 thank-you !!! And I'm glad you're liking my inclusion of people; I'm always sort of worried I'm doing it wrong, even when it's stuff that applies to me πŸ˜‚

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I haven't smiled and giggled this much in monthes ! Oh Valerian *swooning shamelessly* The scenes of the race and the food stall are the cutest thing ever! I love the way you describe his movements, his eyes, and the very subtle beautiful details of him.

 It's also amazing how his personality feels so authentic and endearing. If there was a Valerian in any universe, I believe he would be exactly as you described him if that makes any sense x) (?). I also loved the way I can make many meaningful choices without having a major impact on the overall story while in the same time shaping my character's personality.

 Abeni and Gnarl are the next routes in line for me to read next :)) Can't wait for the next update! Best of luck!

PS: I played the game in an android phone and it works perfectly.

🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑🧑 ahh thank you so much I'm glad you liked it !!! I hope Abeni and Gnarl live up to Valeri's hype πŸ˜‚ let me know how Abeni looks on Android because she seems to be the one with the issue πŸ˜…πŸ˜…

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Hello! I'm stupid in love with Abeni and I cant wait to play more of her route. 


I did play on an Android, and a lot of her text got cut off on the bottom. Just a heads up.

Also thank you so much for having options for nonbinary and having an enby character. Very pleasant surprise <3

I'm glad you like her and thanks for the heads up πŸ˜… I knew Abeni's passages tended to be longer but I hate doing development work on my phone. Phones are so stupidly delicate and debugging on them is nightmarish— at the time I didn't have a spare, but I do now !! I'll get it fixed as soon as I get a minute...

Sorry for the double reply but it occurred to me that I didn't ask what sort of device you're using !! Let me know if you can so I'm a little bit better prepared to fix Abeni up before next release :)

Oh no worries. I was using an Android, a Samsung Galaxy J7 Perx.

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I just finished the demo for Gnarl's route and I am dying for more. Every time there was a screen break I was like "please don't be over yet". Do you have any ideas when we'll see a full route released? 

I'd also like to offer help for free if you need any. I don't know a ton of coding, but I can draw a little and I'm great with editing and grammar. Even if you don't need any help in the actual development, I'm donating through Ko-Fi. I'm just so desperate for more Gnarl. 

You're awesome. Now off to fall in love with Valerian. 

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The full route will be about seven chapters (for each character). This is being developed in tandem with another game I'm making (Bad Ritual, by necessity so I don't burn out on one story) and while I try to finish another diploma and get a job;; So unfortunately I'm not going to promise any specific date for release, but know that it's a fully planned game with all the assets it currently needs.

And thank-you so much for offering! As I mentioned MH has all its planned assets (although people on Tumblr would probably love it if you drew something) but if you notice any typos or mixed up words during your playthrough let me know! And thank you so much for the donation !! <3<3<3

Have fun playing the other routes and have a great day !!

EDIT: There's also a Discord Channel started by misakikaito

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I am totally and completely in love with Gnarl, I need more, I need to know what they're hidden O-O

Oh, and the cellphone version works just fine for me 

What ISN'T Gnarl hiding, and I'm glad the cellphone version works okay !! Gnarl had some pretty long passages so I'm glad they all fit.

*injects gnarl's route intravenously thru my arm* gotta get m'fix. 

Hey, thanks for my entire life/daydream fuel HeartForge u funky lil gamedev 

<3<3<3<3<3<3<3 Glad you like it !!!! Hope you read the disclaimers and ingredient list of Gnarl before inserting them into your bloodstream !! 

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i played every possible route and im so,,, emotionally attached to the characters?? how did you do that pls explain my heart is full of love for this game. THANK YOU

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It's mostly the foul witchcraft I used as part of my pact with the devil to write Manor Hill !! I'm glad you like it and hope it keeps filling your heart with love !! Thank you for leaving a comment !!

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Finally got around to playing Gnarl's route and I'm LIVING FOR IT. I love the comfortably flirty atmosphere and oh? Gnarl's been away and out of contact for three months? And is evasive about it? Love this mystery! And I love the balance between being mad at Gnarl and worried about them.

"Jerk," you snap, laying perfectly still to let your body just absorb the humiliation.  Fave line

The over-broccoli confrontation was sooo suspenseful and convincing that I felt jittery and still do tbh.

"What a thing to say to someone who knows every spot that you're ticklish." Love how this shows they've definitely knowing each other for years.

At first I thought the player could only lose the card game, but then I played through again bc I'd forgotten to save and accidentally won. I loove the various ways the game, and every other conversation, can turn out and all the options you give. 

Same goes for Valerian's route, so many choices! The chase down the hall was fun and adorable, Valerian is definitely Too Smooth. "You're sitting on him, and...now what." I'm dyING.

And the description of his eyes is beautiful!

Everything feels so well-developed and I'm so damn excited to see where this goes!

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I looooooove yooooooouuuuuuuu. I'm also happy to know that both winning and losing the card game was an option because my god I could only test it so many times before jesus has to take the wheel and whatever happens happens. And !! I'm glad the choices seem plentiful I was kind of waffling about if I had enough or not. Think the next round is gunna let yall flesh out the character a bit more !!

ARGH, YOUR GAME IS AWESOME!!!

Phew, now that we've gotten that out of the way, let me just (calmly) say how much I enjoyed your work. All of the characters are well-defined and interesting, the mystery is intriguing, and the romance is really well written. I like to play romance/otome games — lol, it's my secret shame — and while I've played quite a few, the list of how many that have actually made me feel invested in the romance is fairly short. However, I can already tell that your game belongs on that list! You are really good at paying attention to all of the small details — the little looks, touches, expressions, frustrations, exchanges, ect. — that go into building a relationship. (I usually have a favorite but I really can't choose between Valerian and Gnarl. I love them both!)  Also, choices! I love the fact that the game actually feels interactive rather than static like many VNs, although I can imagine that that makes it a huge pain to code! 

Out of curiosity, do you have other works that are available to read? I saw something on your tumblr about a fic called ad coleum, and while I now feel like a weird stalker for knowing that, I'd love to read more of your work. Anyway, if you couldn't tell, I really enjoyed the game, and I can't wait to see how the rest of the story goes! 

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This was SUCH a nice message to get this early in the morning (honestly how do hours before 10am exist?) and it gives me the energy to slog my way through. And honestly, no shame in romance/otome. Some of them are ridiculous but that's what we love about them; we're not here to fake like we don't love it x)

I'm super glad you like Valerian and Gnarl, and I hope Abeni lives up to their routes !! Plus you made me feel better about my writing and the amount of choice I give; I'm of the very firm belief that not every choice has the alter the course of the story, and sometimes it feels nice to just choose how to react in any given situation. And I'm in a coding class right now (as we speak actually...) so I'm not unfamiliar with stuff being annoying to code.

As far as other games go, I don't have anything up and coded yet (I used to, but then I re-purposed the game for class and got paranoid and set it to hidden so that no one I worked with could find the original version I wrote which definitely involved kissing, since we're using itchio for assets) but my Tumblr HeartForge has information on games in development (mostly just character junk under the "character" link).  The fic in question is from my AO3 account, which has... a lot of stuff, lol. I can PM you if you're interested in that, but otherwise I'm gunna keep that one on the DL (just from embarrassment, there's nothing particularly scandalous up there).

Thank you for leaving a comment, it brought me to LIFE !!

I can't express completely how much I love this game, and Abeni, Gnarl, and Valerian, but I'll try. Everything's so suspenseful, especially the trek to the front doors, and all three of them are so smooth I'm grinning the whole time.  Just played Valerian's prologue again and I loove all the witty comebacks,  my cheeks hurt from smiling

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What a coincidence every time you comment on my stuff MY face starts hurting from smiling. Sometimes I just comb my old fics for ur comments tbh <3<3<3<3<3<3

So sorry, I didn't write this sooner. New version of the game is so great. The sound adds new tones to the mystery of the place where the story holds us. And the art is so beautiful, that I just can't describe. And I love the texts, and characters, and the story... Owerflowed with the work as I am now I sincerely cant't wait to see Gnarl and Albeni <3 

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I've seen Gnarl at this point and they're gunna knock your socks off :) Thank-you so much for still liking and donating !!!!! <3<3<3<3

will there be a full game browser version? i have a chromebook so it would suck if i couldn't keep playing past the demo ;-;

I... really don't know how to do that? The full thing is built in Ren'py, and with your chromebook uhm... would an android app work?

yeah! but if it was out of your way, i wouldn't want to bother you. 

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lemme have a look at it because the beauty of ren'py is that is takes the files and does everything for me so it's not out of my way, I would just need to test it. your screen resolution will obviously be bigger than that of a phone so there shouldn't be issues with overlap. I think it'll work, if you're willing to guinea pig with me a little x). Let me play with it a little and I'll have a version up that I THINK will work.

EDIT: Okay I have the apk file up. I tested it with a testing program thing and the sound was bad and the transitions sort of jerky, HOWEVER I was testing through a special program for which my system is unsupported? So I'd love to hear how it runs on your chromebook, because if it doesn't work Great I will return to the drawing board to see what the hell is up. Worse comes I'll make a version sans-sound which will help a LOT I think.

i wasn't able to get it to work myself, but that's probs because i have no idea how apks work. 

if you could, i'd appreciate the help on learning how to get it together?

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hm see I'm not sure how exactly to finagle it on a chromebook but I followed this guide to test it out! Like I said it was a little chunky when it ran but my machine isn't supported: ideally, yours will be and you won't notice a difference. If it does end up being a little slow I, I recommended shutting the sounds off. They're just aesthetic and they run the worst.

I wasn't expecting to like Abeni as much as I did, but she's fantastic! Really enjoyed her route. You've created such a lovely cast of characters. They're all interesting and memorable.  There's so much I like about your game, but I don't want to ramble.

My page is a pro-ramble zone so no worries either way !! Thank-you so much for taking the time to comment, and I'm glad you liked everyone !!

I'd leave a heart here, but Albeni took it away. Third route and it's unlike other two. And *spoiler* was wonderful. And *spoiler* story is wonderful. I'm stuck on "wonderful", sorry. Thank you for your game. I love it so much.

<3 <3 <3 I'm relieved that you like her tbh, her route was the hardest to get through writing-wise !!

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