ummm im so hooked i love this sm?????? like the story and the characterisation are so good (started on a trigger run and π₯Ί ma i love him) and the MUSIC???? i loveee a good fiddle and this is some very good fiddle!!!!!!
DNIRDJFH I haven't played this through in so long that for a sec I was like damn I put MUSIC in this, cool !! But I remember, I was very proud of myself for the radio gjdncbdk. I also love fiddle music, I can't remember though because my friend plays violin and I intended to put in a recorded practice session but I don't think I've implemented it yet fjdbfnd
Oh gosh is that the full screen, cut off like that and all? Seems like a caching issue, but keep in mind that if you clear your cache you may lose save data from other Twine games. Something is interfering with your device's ability to go fullscreen properly, anyway.
This is a very fun story to read, I'm rather excited to learn more about our guardian and about who/what Zed is (I really liked how you wrote them communicating with the plants, that was very interesting and creative!) and am really invested in learning more about the world that you have made and the place of the MC in it. The bits of storytelling through dialogue is very well done (learning about how this society works and the dangers is very cool) and I like the voice that you use to write, it really draws the reader in I think. I also really like learning more about Crave and am rather attached to him already, as well as learning more about Mantis who seems very interesting. Hope that you have a good day.
ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ AHH THIS IS SO SWEET TY SO MUCH !!! I'm glad you like playing as Zed and hopw you like the mystery !! Also jazzed you like the wonder twins fjdnfjsknd you have a good day too !!!! πππππππππππππππππππππ
Your writing is amazing! I'm sooooo glad you updated this! Itβs so refreshing to play an MC whoβs actually the weird and mysterious one. I canβt wait to uncover more of their secrets!
finally got around to playing through the latest update and i'm really enjoying it so far! i do think i found a small bug, though. when i was playing earlier, i picked the brother as zed's guardian and named him jax.
...or, at least, i thought i did, but apparently his name defaults to rana whenever i load a save, and there's no way to keep the name i chose unless i want to spend the entirety of my playthrough ignoring the save system lol. just thought i'd let you know!
THIS IS AMAZING!!! Just one small bug, I started on Crave's route, but then switched to Trigger's after I woke up and he acted like I was following his route the whole time? Also, please add some context about Roach! I literally have no clue what's even going on, only that he's bad apparently.
You have noooo idea how happy I am to see this was updated. Such a unique concept and I'm really glad you didn't drop it altogether (: This update was very good and seeing it on my feed made my day just wanted you to know that!
An MC with a NIQAB!! Finally!! and an Arabic named brother/sister!! And i can call mom MAMA and dad BABA! it's how i actually call my real mom and dadπ₯Ί as an Arabic, Muslim and niqabi girl myself i never saw an interactive fiction who have a niqab as part of their customizations, i can't describe how ecstatic i was when i saw that! having an mc with a niqab was something i always wanted but i always thought it's not possible especially since their wasn't a lot of people with the same culture and religious background as me who love interactive fictions like i do, I don't know if it was just because of the mc not wanting to be recognized and have nothing to do with culture or religion but i was very happy nonethelessπ₯Ήπ!! Thank you HeartForgeβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ
AHHH I'm really glad it works for you !! Let me know if anything ever reads weird about it, I've been running on very little feedback for all the "normally covered" Zed content ππππππππππππ
What a great update! It's so fun that we're able to see the messenger scene from everyones different perspective.
Usually I stick to one RO on a playthrough, but I love the idea of heading out with a Trigger who doesn't know about the plant powers because Mantis was too busy shooting people to tell anyone~
That's me making sure me down the line doesn't forget that somebody's falling in love with Zed and had somehow missed theyre a salad coversationalist cjsjhcjsj !!!
Enjoyed the update, had a couple of times after choices that it seemed like a page was skipped. Also met the dogs, then had Crave ask me to meet them again later on as of we had not done that. And finally the dog was with us when we came upon the body, but then she was somehow back in the kennel later on and I understand she could have been brought there by someone else but it seemed like she was sticking close to Crave's side right before the body with no mention of her leaving
Probably meased up continuity—a lot of this was written while I was working, so there was a lot of getting up midsentence to talk to customers and then sitting back down π π
I've emptied cache/cookies & refreshed everything but on Trigger's route rn & it feels like things are skipping or something? I had Zed ask why they shouldn't say oral fixation for example & it went to a random but about Zed smiling & Trigger talking about how fast we're walking, asked for one of his caramels & it jumped ahead there too & he called them tough out of nowhere. P sure the error was happening earlier as well but not recalling the specifics, just that the scenes after most of my selections so far have felt kinda stilted & disconnected so I think it's skipping ahead maybe?
Cleared cache again & replayed- most of the issues seem to be fixed so thank you but I think I'm still getting one skipped scene?
After I select the option to ask Trigger for one of his caramels it still skips ahead to the following scene:
" "If you say so," he says with a tone.
"What's that supposed to mean?" you ask, folding your arms over your chest.
"Just that you're playing pretty tough for someone who's playing this dumb." He grins and...is he needling you on purpose?!""
& It feels like a scene is being skipped here since poor Zed asking for caramels isn't even acknowledged lol, no sweet treat for them π
I'm on Trigger's route & playing a Serene Zed- though weirdly the save I made before picking this dialogue says it's for an energetic Zed in that one spot? Unsure if that's part of the bug or I just said something beforehand that made Zed tip over to energetic briefly. Let me know if you need any other info, this is the only scene I'm having the issue with now, all the others seem to be fixed :)
OH EXCELLENT CATCH I forgot to double check that specific choice: INCREDIBLY, you're getting the same answer based on the LAST choice you picked, because the asking him for candy (and the other two) choice just....doesn't have choice code dfkjlh it's just a link to the next page. WILD. anyway should be fixed in a jiffy, thanks for keeping an eye out !!
Glad to help! I think I also found another bug- well before locking into a route, when Zed first meets Marsh & gets to respond to her apologizing for them having wandered too close & getting shot, the answers seems to be pathing incorrectly, answering "good to meet you" seems to take you to the reaction page for having said "if you'd known you would have avoided it" & saying "I didn't mean to" seems to go to the reaction page for saying "good to meet you". Just noticed it for sure when starting a replay for Crave's route rn
& noticed another bug on my replay for Mantis' route, firstly the bit after meeting Marsh def has the responses pathing wrong- I picked the "if I'd known I'd have avoided it" option this time & it seems to go the response for the "I didn't mean to" option. Secondly for the new bug I just noticed I picked a brother this time & set his name as Raheem but when I agreed to have Mantis help carry Zed to the camp the sequence of their brother talking about them having to keep their face covered changed his name to Rana, his name stayed as Rana for the rest of the playthrough as well, not just that one scene. Sorry to keep bothering you I'm just playing the dif routes at work rn & pointing out things as I notice them π
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ummm im so hooked i love this sm?????? like the story and the characterisation are so good (started on a trigger run and π₯Ί ma i love him) and the MUSIC???? i loveee a good fiddle and this is some very good fiddle!!!!!!
DNIRDJFH I haven't played this through in so long that for a sec I was like damn I put MUSIC in this, cool !! But I remember, I was very proud of myself for the radio gjdncbdk. I also love fiddle music, I can't remember though because my friend plays violin and I intended to put in a recorded practice session but I don't think I've implemented it yet fjdbfnd
I'm try to play this game on my phone but the selection doesn't appear so I'm stuck in the prolog.
Can you take a screenshot for me?
Sorry taking long time for me to really Κγ)α΄₯(γΎΚ
Oh gosh is that the full screen, cut off like that and all? Seems like a caching issue, but keep in mind that if you clear your cache you may lose save data from other Twine games. Something is interfering with your device's ability to go fullscreen properly, anyway.
if it can fix it I don't mind, thanks for the help :b
I hope that does fix it !!! πππ
This is a very fun story to read, I'm rather excited to learn more about our guardian and about who/what Zed is (I really liked how you wrote them communicating with the plants, that was very interesting and creative!) and am really invested in learning more about the world that you have made and the place of the MC in it. The bits of storytelling through dialogue is very well done (learning about how this society works and the dangers is very cool) and I like the voice that you use to write, it really draws the reader in I think. I also really like learning more about Crave and am rather attached to him already, as well as learning more about Mantis who seems very interesting. Hope that you have a good day.
ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ AHH THIS IS SO SWEET TY SO MUCH !!! I'm glad you like playing as Zed and hopw you like the mystery !! Also jazzed you like the wonder twins fjdnfjsknd you have a good day too !!!! πππππππππππππππππππππ
Your writing is amazing! I'm sooooo glad you updated this! Itβs so refreshing to play an MC whoβs actually the weird and mysterious one. I canβt wait to uncover more of their secrets!
JFJSI weird and mysterious unironically huge compliments thank you so much πππππππ
finally got around to playing through the latest update and i'm really enjoying it so far! i do think i found a small bug, though. when i was playing earlier, i picked the brother as zed's guardian and named him jax.
...or, at least, i thought i did, but apparently his name defaults to rana whenever i load a save, and there's no way to keep the name i chose unless i want to spend the entirety of my playthrough ignoring the save system lol. just thought i'd let you know!
Damn thought I fixed that one !! I'll take a look again π thanks for reading !!!
THIS IS AMAZING!!! Just one small bug, I started on Crave's route, but then switched to Trigger's after I woke up and he acted like I was following his route the whole time? Also, please add some context about Roach! I literally have no clue what's even going on, only that he's bad apparently.
I'll have a look at the bug, and not knowing who Roach is is on purpose!
The cliffhanger is killing me :_(
PLEASE make more of the game for us to enjoy!!!
You have noooo idea how happy I am to see this was updated. Such a unique concept and I'm really glad you didn't drop it altogether (: This update was very good and seeing it on my feed made my day just wanted you to know that!
ππππππ I'm glad you liked it !!!!!
An MC with a NIQAB!! Finally!! and an Arabic named brother/sister!! And i can call mom MAMA and dad BABA! it's how i actually call my real mom and dadπ₯Ί as an Arabic, Muslim and niqabi girl myself i never saw an interactive fiction who have a niqab as part of their customizations, i can't describe how ecstatic i was when i saw that! having an mc with a niqab was something i always wanted but i always thought it's not possible especially since their wasn't a lot of people with the same culture and religious background as me who love interactive fictions like i do, I don't know if it was just because of the mc not wanting to be recognized and have nothing to do with culture or religion but i was very happy nonethelessπ₯Ήπ!! Thank you HeartForgeβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ
AHHH I'm really glad it works for you !! Let me know if anything ever reads weird about it, I've been running on very little feedback for all the "normally covered" Zed content ππππππππππππ
I'm obsessed with this btw
Yaaaay I'm glad you like it ππππππππ
Pronoun missing, ty for letting me know !!! πππ
What a great update! It's so fun that we're able to see the messenger scene from everyones different perspective.
Usually I stick to one RO on a playthrough, but I love the idea of heading out with a Trigger who doesn't know about the plant powers because Mantis was too busy shooting people to tell anyone~
Wait! Just played that route and I love how casually Zed drops that bomb. Yeah, I talk to plants and??
That's me making sure me down the line doesn't forget that somebody's falling in love with Zed and had somehow missed theyre a salad coversationalist cjsjhcjsj !!!
for your end note - i did notice that "mum" was not an option for guardian. its an australian/uk thing
Noted, thanks!
What are the romance options? I didnt see any in the description
They're the three characters you choose between in game π π
Wait! How old is MC? Thought we were a young teenager or something.
No, Zed is an adult. Young adult maybe, but while I leave a lot up to HC including a SPECIFIC age for them to be, Zed is absolutely an adult.
Enjoyed the update, had a couple of times after choices that it seemed like a page was skipped. Also met the dogs, then had Crave ask me to meet them again later on as of we had not done that. And finally the dog was with us when we came upon the body, but then she was somehow back in the kennel later on and I understand she could have been brought there by someone else but it seemed like she was sticking close to Crave's side right before the body with no mention of her leaving
Probably meased up continuity—a lot of this was written while I was working, so there was a lot of getting up midsentence to talk to customers and then sitting back down π π
This should be fixed now !! Thanks for keeping an eye out !! <3
I've emptied cache/cookies & refreshed everything but on Trigger's route rn & it feels like things are skipping or something? I had Zed ask why they shouldn't say oral fixation for example & it went to a random but about Zed smiling & Trigger talking about how fast we're walking, asked for one of his caramels & it jumped ahead there too & he called them tough out of nowhere. P sure the error was happening earlier as well but not recalling the specifics, just that the scenes after most of my selections so far have felt kinda stilted & disconnected so I think it's skipping ahead maybe?
Try playing again, this issue was fixed earlier today. If it continues I might need more specific information.
Cleared cache again & replayed- most of the issues seem to be fixed so thank you but I think I'm still getting one skipped scene?
After I select the option to ask Trigger for one of his caramels it still skips ahead to the following scene:
" "If you say so," he says with a tone.
"What's that supposed to mean?" you ask, folding your arms over your chest.
"Just that you're playing pretty tough for someone who's playing this dumb." He grins and...is he needling you on purpose?!""
& It feels like a scene is being skipped here since poor Zed asking for caramels isn't even acknowledged lol, no sweet treat for them π
I'm on Trigger's route & playing a Serene Zed- though weirdly the save I made before picking this dialogue says it's for an energetic Zed in that one spot? Unsure if that's part of the bug or I just said something beforehand that made Zed tip over to energetic briefly. Let me know if you need any other info, this is the only scene I'm having the issue with now, all the others seem to be fixed :)
OH EXCELLENT CATCH I forgot to double check that specific choice: INCREDIBLY, you're getting the same answer based on the LAST choice you picked, because the asking him for candy (and the other two) choice just....doesn't have choice code dfkjlh it's just a link to the next page. WILD. anyway should be fixed in a jiffy, thanks for keeping an eye out !!
Glad to help! I think I also found another bug- well before locking into a route, when Zed first meets Marsh & gets to respond to her apologizing for them having wandered too close & getting shot, the answers seems to be pathing incorrectly, answering "good to meet you" seems to take you to the reaction page for having said "if you'd known you would have avoided it" & saying "I didn't mean to" seems to go to the reaction page for saying "good to meet you". Just noticed it for sure when starting a replay for Crave's route rn
Next build should fix the mix up in responses for the prologue !!
& noticed another bug on my replay for Mantis' route, firstly the bit after meeting Marsh def has the responses pathing wrong- I picked the "if I'd known I'd have avoided it" option this time & it seems to go the response for the "I didn't mean to" option. Secondly for the new bug I just noticed I picked a brother this time & set his name as Raheem but when I agreed to have Mantis help carry Zed to the camp the sequence of their brother talking about them having to keep their face covered changed his name to Rana, his name stayed as Rana for the rest of the playthrough as well, not just that one scene. Sorry to keep bothering you I'm just playing the dif routes at work rn & pointing out things as I notice them π
No problem these are EXCELLENT bug reports !! I will say though I can't recreate the Raheem bug. Does it happen every time you try it?
There appear to be missing names or something. Not just in this spot either but earlier too. First time reading so I'm not sure what it's meant to be.
I'll have a look !! It's supposed to be your guardian's name.